History book

Salaams, today i had a semi like interview with one of the history teachers, we talked about the book in my segment in the book. I also convinced him to put a segment about Breaking Borders. It was funny he showed me my first draft which was written four-five months ago and asked me if i wanted to change anything. I looked at and saw how relevent it was to whats happening these days. I am open to any advice about my first draft.
The First draft:
I feel that Muslim students are being afraid to express who they are. They are beginning to try to hide their identity in order for them not to be a target in today’s society. They fear that if they, express who they are, they would lose many opportunities in life. I feel. The religion and those who follow it correctly should not be labeled as those who claim they are Muslim but yet, don’t follow the rules and guidelines which Islam has laid down. These days there are stereotypes on Muslim in the challenge for every Muslim student is to prove to them that those stereotypes are false. That instead of assimilating in forgetting who we are or isolating and taking violent means to insure their security or that they don’t get oppressed we teach, We give awareness to the community to what Muslims are really like. Muslims student’s challenges are not the negative comments or people being biased to them. It’s about spreading awareness to the community and teaching the world what Muslims are really about. I believe that stereotypes, negative comments and actions toward a group of people come through fear. Fear comes through lack of knowledge. So in order for Muslims to make differences they have to spread knowledge to the world what Islam is all about? This could be through many means, starting a club, dialogues or even an individual not being scared to of expressing his/her identity and showing people of how he is not a threat to society. It’s amazing to be in a multicultural school because it’s like a mini world. Where you have different nations under one roof, wherein in order to have the school flourish, you need to learn about the people around you. There’s so much potential in a multicultural school to change the world, because when something outrageous happens in the world in its blame on a religion, a person well say well that’s not true because I know so and so and he’s apart of that religion and he would never do such a thing.